Tuesday 18 June 2013

axe murder hollow


Susan and Ned were driving through a dark and gloomy empty section of highway. Lightning flashed, thunder roared, the sky went dark in the torrential downpour.
     “We’d better stop,”  said Susan worriedly.
      Ned nodded his head in agreement. He stepped on the brake, and suddenly the car started to slide on the slick pavement. They plunged off the road and slid to a halt at the bottom of an incline.
     Pale and shaking, Ned quickly turned to check if Susan was all right.  When she nodded, Ned relaxed and looked through the rain soaked windows. 
     “I’m going to see how bad it is,” he told Susan, and when out into the storm. She saw his blurry figure in the headlight, walking around the front of the car. A moment later, he jumped in beside her, soaking wet. 
      “The car’s not badly damaged, but we’re wheel-deep in mud,” he said. “I’m going to have to go for help.”
      Susan swallowed nervously. There would be no quick rescue here. He told her to turn off the headlights and lock the doors until he returned. 
     Axe Murder Hollow. Although Ned hadn't said the name aloud, they both knew what he had been thinking when he told her to lock the car.  This was the place where a man had once taken an axe and hacked his wife to death in a jealous rage over an alleged affair. Supposedly, the axe-wielding spirit of the husband continued to haunt this section of the road and ever since this road has barley been used.
      Outside the car, Susan heard a shriek, a loud thump, and a strange gurgling noise. But she couldn't see anything in the darkness.
      Frightened, she shrank down into her seat. She sat in silence for a while, and then she noticed another sound.  Bump. Bump. Bump.  It was a soft sound, like something being blown by the wind. 
      Suddenly, the car was illuminated by a bright light.  An official sounding voice told her to get out of the car. Ned must have found a police officer.  Susan unlocked the door and stepped out of the car.  As her eyes adjusted to the bright light, she saw it.
      Hanging by his feet from the tree next to the car was the dead body of Ned.  His throat, which was pouring out with blood had been cut so deeply that he was nearly decapitated. The wind swung his corpse back and forth so that it thumped against the tree. Bump. Bump. Bump.
     Susan screamed and ran toward the voice and the light. As she drew close, she realized the light was not coming from a flashlight. Standing there was the glowing figure of a man with a smile on his face and a large, solid, and definitely real axe in his hands. She backed away from the glowing figure until she bumped into the car.  
      “Playing around when my back was turned,” the ghost whispered, stroking the sharp blade of the axe with his fingers. “ I killed my wife and I have plenty more people to kill as well as her!

      The last thing Susan  saw was the glint of the axe blade in the eerie, incandescent light.

16 comments:

  1. It very scary but every sentence made me want to read more

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  2. WOW! i can really picture it in my mind!:0

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  3. very very scary it could paint a pitcher in my mind, not a very nice one at that but still very good

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  4. very cool, makes me want to read more

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  5. The cliffhanger was really intriguing and the overall story was awesome!!!

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  6. I liked the cliffhanger and it made me want to read more. Also the overall story was an amazing idea.

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  7. WOW! that is so freaky but actually pretty cool. Every sentence made me want to read more plus I could paint an amazing picture in my mind.

    The story sounds beast!

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  8. good cliffhanger and it was very intriguing. it painted a picture in my mind.

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  9. wo! Soophie that was freaky please calm down and perphaps leave me alone for a couple of days!?

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  10. oh my gosh sophie!that was amazingly scary!Every word made me wan't to read on!

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  11. Really scary!!!

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  12. i like death.

    really scary@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,????????????/////??/???////???/::;;;;;;;:

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  13. WOW!!! It encouraged me to read more. How can you write like that it's amazing!

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  14. wow that made a shiver go down my spine !!!!!!!

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